Sexy Sadie

I'm curious to know what the tune to this song is. It was good, more pop than rock, right? One mistake I noticed though: In the chorus: ~Now theres an ...

Hello! The only problem I really saw was a few spelling errors and such, but this was a very creative piece of writing! Here's what I noticed. //. Prologue The ...

Day Tripper (by the way, did you know that is a Beatle's song?), Haha. Whoa, and I thought people on this site only wrote serious stuff for a while there! ...

Hello M.B. Author! I just found a few things. ~The dancers feet are right now behind the curtain, preparing for the show.~ Dancers should be Dancer's, with the apostrophe. They ...

Heya! You just cant (can’t, don’t forget that comma) grasp the concept, i am what i am, (capitalize both of ‘I’s) no gimmicks, no labels (capitalize ‘no’) ( put comma ...

Heya! Let me fix the grammer mistakes first. "Goodbye cruel world" she had said like a melodramatic soap. No, she can't be serious. There has to be a proper way ...

Hello Phantom_Blackfire_Wings, -And looked in the Mirror,- the M in mirror shouldn't be capatalised. -When I got dressed, nothing looked right- Period after this sentence. -Holes were in his feet, ...

Hello, Ok, here I go with the crit... I whisper my words t hrough the cold paned glass. (capatalize the 't') No ear can hear them, n o voice replies. ...

Hello NavysLittleReject, Let me see... To what do I owe this feeling? Whom do I appreciate? A gentle whisper of words so delicate They could break the very souls of ...

I love Harry Potter and am a little ashamed to say, the whole time I wanted Hermione and Malfoy to be together in the end. Does this sound weird for ...

Ha! Funny! I saw three teeny weeny mitakes though. -“Are you gonna’ arrest me or something?”- Eh, I'm not so sure about this one. To me, one half of my ...

Hello Ailam. I read all the other chapters, I like it, but the last two kind of lost their touch. Things were way too rushed. Try and slow it down ...

Hello Moon14, Very sad poem. -this is something I just wanna savor.- Don't put wanna, it sounds so unprofessional. Use want to instead. -Never before have I felt this way, ...

Sureal (Cool name by the way)- I liked this, like the first critique, I do hope this continues, which, I see, it will. Although, how can the humans see the ...

Hello, I read the Prolouge and the first chapter, but was too lazy to crit, so I'll just crit on this chapter. I thought the other two parts were amazing ...